Peer Review (203김보영)

 
Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

4 points, it is entirely great, but the reason she insists is little awkward.


How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

I think it needs to explain relation between openess and anonimity.


Thesis
What is the thesis?

Internet anonamity is needed in Korea.
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Is the thesis clear and debatable?

Yes, it is clear and debatable thesis.


If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

Internet anonamity is essential in cyberspace.

Any other thoughts?

No

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

I can easily identify the 5 parts.


Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
It is enough to catch my attention at first, however its thesis and introduction is not related, i think. 갑자기 익명성이 중요한 가치라고 하니까 뜬금 없는 것 같습니다. 왜 사회에서 중요한지 설명을 간략하게 하면 좋을 것 같아요
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Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

Yes.


Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

Yes.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

Yes.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
Yes.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I think structure is great.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I agreed this thesis.


When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I agreed this thesis because it is successful essay that insists importance of anonamity.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

I liked narration parts.


How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

The author added sufficient research information.

Research
Is the author using research effectively?

Yes.

Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes

Are the sources obvious?

Yes.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

Yes. Especially, I liked that information that explain history of anonamity.
It supports anonamity's importance.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
I can't understand concession part.