peer review (203김선혁)

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?




How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?



Thesis

What is the thesis?

-Anonymity should be protected on the Internet.


Is the thesis clear and debatable?

-Yes it is.


If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

-Anonymity is essential elements of the Internet.



Classical Argument

Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

-I can easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument.


Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?

-At the introduction, he analogize the internet world as a sea. It is enough to catch readers' attention. It is really interesting introduction.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

-Yes it gives specific background information about how dangerous internet world is. It supports his thesis.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

-Yes it does.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

-It is reasonable to support author's opinion because it points out  counterparts' argument exactly.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?

-Yes.


Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

- I disagreed with the thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

- I still disagree with the thesis, but I think it is really reasonable essay.



Research

Is the author using research effectively?

-Yes. From real cases to the Universal Declaration of Human Rights, author used
research effectively.


Is the research from appropriate sources?

- Yes it is.

Are the sources obvious?

- Yes they are.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

- Yes they are.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?

- No there aren't.