20305KimMinJeong: 2014

2014년 12월 7일 일요일

Final Draft

Serious, and infectious epidemics seem to exist only in the movies or the countries far from us. However, due to the increasing international exchange such as overseas trips and trades, it started to give direct effects to all over the world and many citizens are more worried about breakout of epidemics than before. In reality, because of infectious international disease - Ebola, many Korean strongly insisted that international events that were supposed to held in DukSeong Women's University should be suspended or stopped. Although Korean government and DukSeong explained the Ebola situation, it was beyond their ability to calm down Korean citizens since there wasn't any exact news or prevention. Even though it seems to be not dangerous, the world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemic break out.

As everyone knows, since international events and games' scale is enormous and wide, many people -especially foreigners and goods from overseas enter to attend those events. In reality, for example, the yachting center which held the international yacht race in Qingdao, China closed its door. The government insisted that it's because of toxic algal bloom, however, a Chinese netizen disclosed that it were because of epidemic cerebrospinal meningitis.(Park, 2008) Seeing, we can realize that the government counters outbreak of epidemics by suspending its race or shutting the area because international events and its participant could spread infectious disease all over the world.

Also, although airport quarantine station and other organization work hard by various ways, since international events have many variables, it is hard to stop epidemics by just checking overseas goods and people.

International events and breakout or spread of international epidemics might be not related. However, in two points of view -one is about prevention system, and another is about opinions and responses of citizens, proceeding international events or game quite affect our society negatively with epidemics.

Of course, WHO, governments and Airport quarantine station always keep an eye on breakout and spread of international epidemics. According to Incheon Airport Web site, they quarantine almost every good from all over the world and have very difficult, picky process or law. If you look into their manual, you will realize how difficult to bring overseas goods to the country. (Kim,2014) Also, WHO(World Health Organization) has divided the situation when the epidemic breaks out. Looked like this, many people and organization are working hard to prevent or stop the international epidemics. However, although they do their best to prevent it, dangerous infectious diseases always break out and cause negative results. It is because of increasing of an international exchange as I mentioned in the introduction. Especially, international events, which many people-maybe people all around the world attend contribute to spreading of epidemics. Occasionally, Its scale is quite extensive so many foreigners make a transfer, and they are likely to be 'moving' source of infection.

Actually, In 2009, during influenza season, there was Global Fair & Festival in Incheon, Korea.(Naver news,2009) As many people supposed and worried, it caused many infected people and brought chaos and concern to many people. Although people quarantine and examine foreigners and overseas goods, since quarantine and prevention are people's work, if international events and games are held, there might be serious and rapid spread of international epidemics.

Also, in the situation that doesn't have any exact prevention of epidemics and news or report about it, just proceeding international events will only bring confusion to the people and our whole society. In effect, Korean government and the host's confused, a late decision and response made Korean citizens felt great fear when the Model UN was held in DukSeong Women's University in Seoul during Ebola season.(Choi, 2014) Even Korean citizens moved against that international events and kept insisting suspend of the event. Korean citizens did that kind of fierce behavior because there weren't enough news,reports,or certain prevention of Ebola. Therefore, their movement achieved prohibition of three Nigerian students' entry and this happening drew world's attention and brought the country's dignity down the ground. If these events were delayed, Korean citizens would not have done these things.

Although my opinion is correct and reasonable, some people will against my opinion. They will reason two things. First is that we can certainly solve the epidemic problem in advance since there are many systems for it. Second is that if the international events are suspended just because of spread of international epidemics, there will be loss of time and money. However, there are always unexpected elements although people and organization prevent international epidemics beforehand. Because of Ebola, many children in Africa became 'Ebola Orphan'.(Patrick,2014) Its problem can be solved soon, but we don't have enough ability to resolve the after situation. Also, since citizens have only one way to know the truth( by news, reports), calming down and ensuring them by certain solution - suspending, delaying international events can be effective way to cool down people and prevent spread or outbreak of international diseases.

Since international exchange is more increasing than before, it is hard to prevent or stop the prevalence of international epidemics. Also, if an epidemic is not familiar diseases for people, their confusion will be growing too. Therefore, the world needs to cooperate to delay the international events or stop them to calm down citizens all over the world and prevent international diseases. Remind the happening of DukSeong Women's university during Ebola season. This situation brought confusion but also a crisis between the countries. Also, this situation shows how we should react to outbreak of international epidemics when we don't have any knowledge or prevention. When there aren't exact and enough solution to prevent international epidemics, the whole world should suspend all the international events if epidemics breakout.

References

http://www.kgnews.co.kr/news/articleView.html?idxno=401974

http://kr.wsj.com/posts/2014/10/24/

http://www.sisafocus.co.kr/news/articleView.html?idxno=103620

http://news.naver.com/main/read.nhn?mode=LSD&mid=sec&sid1=102&oid=003&aid=0002831984

http://www.mt.co.kr/view/mtview.php?type=1&no=2008071711372055272&outlink=1

http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=1067403&cid=40942&categoryId=31659

http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=487879&cid=42299&categoryId=42299

http://blog.daum.net/njs7908/8839592,
http://news.kukinews.com/article/view.asp?page=1&gCode=soc&arcid=0921461384&cp=nv

http://blog.naver.com/sagemara/11046041

http://www.mt.co.kr/view/mtview.php?type=1&no=2008071711372055272&outlink=1

2014년 12월 5일 금요일

peer review (203김선혁)

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

Thesis

What is the thesis?

-Anonymity should be protected on the Internet.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?

-Yes it is.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

-Anonymity is essential elements of the Internet.

Classical Argument

Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

-I can easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?

-At the introduction, he analogize the internet world as a sea. It is enough to catch readers' attention. It is really interesting introduction.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

-Yes it gives specific background information about how dangerous internet world is. It supports his thesis.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

-Yes it does.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

-It is reasonable to support author's opinion because it points out counterparts' argument exactly.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?

-Yes.

Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

- I disagreed with the thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

- I still disagree with the thesis, but I think it is really reasonable essay.

Research

Is the author using research effectively?

-Yes. From real cases to the Universal Declaration of Human Rights, author used
research effectively.

Is the research from appropriate sources?

- Yes it is.

Are the sources obvious?

- Yes they are.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

- Yes they are.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?

- No there aren't.

2014년 12월 1일 월요일

Peer Review (203김보영)

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

4 points, it is entirely great, but the reason she insists is little awkward.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

I think it needs to explain relation between openess and anonimity.

Thesis
What is the thesis?

Internet anonamity is needed in Korea.
.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?

Yes, it is clear and debatable thesis.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

Internet anonamity is essential in cyberspace.

Any other thoughts?

No

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

I can easily identify the 5 parts.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
It is enough to catch my attention at first, however its thesis and introduction is not related, i think. 갑자기 익명성이 중요한 가치라고 하니까 뜬금 없는 것 같습니다. 왜 사회에서 중요한지 설명을 간략하게 하면 좋을 것 같아요
.
Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

Yes.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

Yes.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

Yes.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
Yes.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I think structure is great.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I agreed this thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I agreed this thesis because it is successful essay that insists importance of anonamity.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

I liked narration parts.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

The author added sufficient research information.

Research
Is the author using research effectively?

Yes.

Is the research from appropriate sources?
Yes

Are the sources obvious?

Yes.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

Yes. Especially, I liked that information that explain history of anonamity.
It supports anonamity's importance.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
I can't understand concession part.

2014년 11월 16일 일요일

Second Draft

Serious, and infectious epidemics seem to exist only in the movies or the countries far from us. However, due to the increasing international exchange such as overseas trips and trades, it started to give direct effects to all over the world and many citizens are more worried about breakout of epidemics than before. In reality, because of infectious international disease - Ebola, many Korean strongly insisted that international events which was supposed to held in DukSeong Women's University should be suspended or stopped. Although Korean government and DukSeong explained the Ebola situation, it was beyond their ability to calm down Korean citizens since there wasn't any exact news or prevention. Although it seems to be not dangerous, the world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemic break out.

As everyone knows, since international events and games' scale is very big and wide, many people -especially foreigners and goods from overseas enter to attend that events. In reality, for example, the yachting center which held the international yacht race in Qingdao, China closed its door. The government insisted that it's because of toxic algal bloom, however, a Chinese netizen disclosed that it was because of epidemic cerebrospinal meningitis. Seeing this, we can realize that the government counter outbreak of epidemics by suspending its race or shutting the area because international events and its participant could spread infectious disease all over the world.

Also, although airport quarantine station and other organization work hard by various ways, since international events have many variables, it is hard to stop epidemics by just checking overseas goods and people.

International events and breakout or spread of international epidemics might be not related. However, in two points of view -one is about prevention system and another is about opinions and responses of citizens, proceeding international events or game quite affect our society negatively with epidemics.

Ofcourse, WHO, governments and Airport quarantine station always keep an eye on breakout and spread of international epidemics. They quarantine almost every goods from all over the world and have very difficult, picky process or law. If you look into this article, you will realize how difficult to bring overseas goods to the country.

http://blog.naver.com/sagemara/11046041

Also, WHO(World Health Organization) has divided the situation when the epidemic breaks out. Looked like this, many people and organization are working hard to prevent or stop the international epidemics. However, although they do their best to prevent it, dangerous infectious diseases always break out and cause negative results. It is because of increasing of international exchange as i mentioned in introduction. Especially, international events, which many people-maybe people all around the world attend contribute to spread of epidemics. Occasionally, Its scale is quite extensive so many foreigners make a transfer and they are likely to be 'moving' source of infection.

Actually, in 2009, during influenza season, there was Global Fair & Festival in Incheon, Korea. As many people supposed and worried, it caused many infected people and brought chaos and concern to many people. Although people quarantine and examine foreigners and overseas goods, since quarantine and prevention are people's work, if international events and games are held, there might be serious and rapid spread of international epidemics.

Also, in the situation which doesn't have any exact prevention of epidemics and news or report about it, just proceeding international events will only bring confusion to the people and our whole society. In effect, Korean government and the host's confused , late decision and response made Korean citizens felt great fear when the Model UN was held in DukSeong Women's University in Seoul during Ebola season. Even Korean citizens moved against that international events and kept insisting suspend of the event. Korean citizens did that kind of fierce behavior because there weren't enough news , reports, or certain prevention of Ebola. Therefore, their movement achieved prohibition of three Nigerian students' entry and this happening drew world's attention and brought the country's dignity down the the ground. If this events were delayed, Korean citizens would have not done these things.

Although my opinion is correct and reasonable, some people will against my opinion. They will reason two things - we can certainly solve the epidemic problem in advance since there are many systems for it, and if the international events are suspended just because of spread of international epidemics, there will be loss of time and money. However, there are always unexpected elements although people and organization prevent international epidemics beforehand. Because of Ebola, many children in Africa became 'Ebola Orphan'. Its problem might can be solved soon, but we don't have enough ability to resolve the after situation. Also, since citizens have only one way to know the truth( by news, reports), calming down and ensuring them by certain solution - suspending, delaying international events can be effective way to cool down people and prevent spread or outbreak of international diseases.

Since international exchange is more increasing than before, it is hard to prevent or stop the prevalence of international epidemics. Also, if epidemic is not familiar diseases for people, their confusion will be growing too. Therefore, the world need to cooperate to delay the international events or stop them to calm down citizens all over the world and prevent international diseases. Remind the happening of DukSeong Women's university during Ebola season. This brought confusion but also crisis between the countries. This shows how we should react to outbreak of international epidemics when we don't have any knowledge or prevention. When there aren't exact and enough solution to prevent international epidemics, the whole world should suspend all the international events if epidemics break out.

Research

Research : 10/26 What Airport Quarantine Station do for outbreak of epidemic?

Source: http://www.mt.co.kr/view/mtview.php?type=1&no=2008071711372055272&outlink=1

My Topic:
The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemics break out.

What I hope to learn from this source: I want to get real case of breakout of international epidemics and its affection or danger.

Notes:

1. The yachting center which is located in Qingdao, China had to close its center. Peole predict its reason is breakout of epidemic cerebrospinal meningitis.

2. Actually, China said that they close the yachting center due to toxic algal bloom, a Chinese netizen exposed that the government reported that epidemic cerebrospinal meningitis was just a cold.

Final Thoughts:

From this article, I could get a real case of international epidemics in the international events place. The government didn't inform what is yachting center's problem and why people had serious disease. I will use this to explain what will happen when the government do not report about international disease, which can affect us.

2014년 10월 27일 월요일

Self evaluation of the first draft

1) What score do you think you deserve? Here is the rubric:

2 points - The first draft is thoughtful and a good start to an effective persuasive essay. It demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument.

1 point - The student completes a first draft that demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument

0 points - The first draft is inadequate

- I think I deserve to get 0 points because although my first draft is completed, it seems to show readers that I didn't understand structure of the classical argument. I think I should have read many examples of the classicl argument enough.

2) What did you do well?

- I added real examples related to my topic well, and I did well on the summation because I summarize my essay and repoint my thesis well.

3) What could you have done better?

- I think I could have found more real cases and examples about my topic. It would make my first draft reasonable since it would add validity and reliability.

4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?

- I believe I did the best on the last paragraph of the confirmation because real example supported my claims making it reasonable.

5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?

- I think the narration was the most poor part because I didn't understand what that is and how I should write it. Also, prior paragraphs of my confirmation are poor too because they seem like that I just say same thing over again.

6) What's your strategy to make your second draft better?

- I believe that I should add explanation of what is international epidemics and its damage more specifically to make readers understand my essay more esaily that before.

2014년 10월 26일 일요일

First Draft

Serious, and infectious epidemics seem to exist only in the movies or the countries far from us. However, due to the increasing international exchange such as overseas trips and trades, it started to give direct effects to all over the world and many citizens are more worried about breakout of epidemics than before. In reality, because of infectious international disease - Ebola, many Korean strongly insisted that international events which was supposed to held in DukSeong Women's University should be suspended or stopped. Although Korean government and DukSeong explained the Ebola situation, it was beyond their ability to calm down Korean citizens since there wasn't any exact news or prevention. Although it seems to be not dangerous, the world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemic break out.

As everyone knows, since international events and games' scale is very big and wide, many people -especially foreigners and goods from overseas enter to attend that events. Therefore, international events and its participant could spread infectious disease all over the world.

Also, although airport quarantine station and other organization work hard by various ways, since international events have many variables, it is hard to stop epidemics by just checking overseas goods and people.

http://blog.naver.com/sagemara/11046041

Also, in the situation which doesn't have any exact prevention of epidemics and news or report about it, just proceeding international events will only bring confusion to the people and our whole society. In effect, Korean government and the host's confused , late decision and response made Korean citizens felt great fear when the Model UN was held in DukSeong Women's University in Seoul during Ebola season. Even Korean citizens moved against that international events and kept insisting suspend of the event. Korean citizens did that kind of fierce behavior because there weren't enough news , reports, or certain prevention of Ebola. Therefore, their movement achieved prohibition of three Nigerian students' entry and this happening drew world's attention and brought the country's dignity down the the ground. If this events were delayed, Korean citizens would have not done these things.

Although my opinion is correct and reasonable, some people will against my opinion. They will reason two things - we can certainly solve the epidemic problem in advance since there are many systems for it, and if the international events are suspended just because of spread of international epidemics, there will be loss of time and money. However, there are always unexpected elements although people and organization prevent international epidemics beforehand. Also, since citizens have only one way to know the truth( by news, reports), calming down and ensuring them by certain solution - suspending, delaying international events can be effective way to cool down people and prevent spread or outbreak of international diseases.

Since international exchange is more increasing than before, it is hard to prevent or stop the prevalence of international epidemics. Also, if epidemic is not familiar diseases for people, their confusion will be growing too. Therefore, the world need to cooperate to delay the international events or stop them to calm down citizens all over the world and prevent international diseases. Remind the happening of DukSeong Women's university during Ebola season. This brought confusion but also crisis between the countries. This shows how we should react to outbreak of international epidemics when we don't have any knowledge or prevention. When there aren't exact and enough solution to prevent international epidemics, the whole world should suspend all the international events if epidemics break out.

Narration

My persuasive argument thesis is: The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemic breaks out.

1. What do people already know about my topic?

They already know that pandemic epidemic is seriously infectious and dangerous. Also, they know that WHO or the governments work for it if epidemics break out. And most of them are aware of increasing of international exchange.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

-what do airport quarantine station when epidemic breaks out?
http://blog.naver.com/sagemara/11046041

-what is international epidemics?
http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=1067403&cid=40942&categoryId=31659

- Real case of breakout of epidemics caused by international events in Korea, Incheon
http://blog.daum.net/njs7908/8839592,http://news.kukinews.com/article/view.asp?page=1&gCode=soc&arcid=0921461384&cp=nv

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

Many people will consider about proceeding international events for whole world's safety. Also, they will be aware of exact definition and situation about pandemic epidemics. If people ignore me, they will keep worrying about passive and negative attitude or behavior of the governments about epidemics and they will be in a state of confusion. Also, they would bring bad effects of results to our society.

My Narration

Conclusion

Since international exchange is more increasing than before, it is hard to prevent or stop the prevalence of international epidemics. Also, if epidemic is not familiar diseases for people, their confusion will be growing too. Therefore, the world need to cooperate to delay the international events or stop them to calm down citizens all over the world and prevent international diseases. Remind the happening of DukSeong Women's university during Ebola season. This brought confusion but also crisis between the countries. This shows how we should react to outbreak of international epidemics when we don't have any knowledge or prevention. When there aren't exact and enough solution to prevent international epidemics, the whole world should suspend all the international events if epidemics break out.

Refutation and Concession

1. What is my thesis?

The world should suspend all the international events if epidemics break out.

2. What is the opposite position?

There is no need to suspend or to stop the international events because of epidemics since it is related to these problem- schedules, cost.

3. What arguments can I anticipate?
a) Moore's Law (Computer processors double in power every year). b) Kurzweil, Google's futurologist and singularity poster boy. c) Advances in robot technology mirroring human behavior.

1. Outbreak and spread of infectious disease can be solved in advance so we don't have to delay it.

2. If the international events are suspended, there will be additional financial and schedule problems.
4. How will I counter those arguments?

1.If it can solved in advance, there should be no infection in domestic condition.

2. Calming down people and certain prevention are more important than time and money problems.

My Refutation and Concession

Although my opinion is correct and reasonable, some people will against my opinion. They will reason two things - we can certainly solve the epidemic problem in advance since there are many systems for it, and if the international events are suspended just because of spread of international epidemics, there will be loss of time and money. However, there are always unexpected elements although people and organization prevent international epidemics beforehand. Also, since citizens have only one way to know the truth( by news, reports) calming down and ensuring them by certain solution - suspending, delaying international events can be effective way to cool down people and prevent spread or outbreak of international diseases.

Confrimation

1. What is my thesis?

The world should suspend all the international events if epidemic breaks out.

2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis?

I am using real cases, experts' opinions.

3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?

I think my arguments are based on both evidence and emotion. It is because I will use real case of breakout of epidemics and opinions of citizens. Also, I have some articles to support my thesis statistically or logically.
My Confirmation

International events and breakout or spread of international epidemics is not related. However, in two points of view -one is about prevention system and another is about opinions and responses of citizens, proceeding international events or game quite affect our society negatively by epidemics.

http://blog.naver.com/sagemara/11046041

Also, WHO(World Health Organization) has divided the situation when the epidemic breaks out. Looked like this, many people and organization are working hard to prevent or stop the international epidemics. However, although they do their best to prevent it, dangerous infectious diseases always break out and cause negative results. It is because of increasing of international exchange as i mentioned in introduction. Especially, international events, which many people-maybe people all around the world attend.Occasionally, Its scale is quite extensive so many foreigners make a transfer and they are likely to be 'moving' source of infection.

Research

Research : 10/26 What Airport Quarantine Station do for outbreak of epidemic?

Source: http://blog.naver.com/sagemara/11046041

My Topic:
The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemics break out.

What I hope to learn from this source:

I want to know what do airport quarantine station for outbreak of epidemic and introduce it to the readers.

Notes:

1. Airport quarantine station asks for international certificate of Vaccination of Cholera and Yellow fever.

2. They quarantine for animals, plants or agricultural products.

Final Thoughts:

I think this can be explanation of what do airport quarantine station for outbreak of epidemic.
However, this can support my essay because it bring us this question : Then, even airport quarantine station quarantine many goods and people, why pandemic epidemic breaks out?

Research

Research : 10/26 Real case of breakout of epidemics caused by international events in Korea, Incheong

Source:
http://blog.daum.net/njs7908/8839592,
http://news.kukinews.com/article/view.asp?page=1&gCode=soc&arcid=0921461384&cp=nv

My Topic:
The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemics break out.

What I hope to learn from this source:

I hope this source can be supporting material which can prove that international events are likely to cause breakout of international epidemics. Also, since it is real case of breakout of epidemics, it can be more reasonable.

Notes:

1. During influenza season, Global Fair & Festival 2009 Incheon, Korea was held although many citizens worried about it.

2. Two Thailand students and 14 operating personnel became infected by Influenza.

3. Many spectators were very furious about this situation.

4. In reality, the committee didn't attend the conference of Influenza and didn't hand out the list of foreigners who entered for this events.

Final Thoughts:

I believe that this source could describe the situation which the government was quiet negligent about pandemic disease, and there were many infected persons as a result.
I think this can add reality and validity to my essay.

First Draft Introduction

Serious, and infectious epidemics seem to exist only in the movies or the countries far from us. However, due to the increasing international exchange such as overseas trips and trades, it started to give direct effects to all over the world and many citizens are more worried about breakout of epidemics than before. In reality, because of infectious international disease - Ebola, many Korean strongly insisted that international events which was supposed to held in DukSeong Women's University should be suspended or stopped. Although Korean government and DukSeong explained the Ebola situation, it was beyond their ability to calm down Korean citizens since there wasn't any exact news or prevention. Although it seems to be not dangerous, the world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemic break out.

1. Attention grabber -
I attracted the audience by explaining real case of breakout of international disease and responses of Korean citizens. And I pointed out why citizens responded like that.

2. Explains the topic-
In the attention grabber, I introduce all the elements of my topic : reasons why epidemic spreads more effectively nowadays, responses of citizens about breakout of epidemics, and the their connections with my thesis.

3. My thesis -
It is reasonable, and clear. I believe that to support my thesis "The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemic break out", explaining current situation related to international disease Ebola was effective.

2014년 10월 6일 월요일

Articulation

1) My argument

I want to insist that the whole world should stop international events if epidemics break out. Although all the citizens of the world worry about epidemics and demand to stop any international events or movement , the government ignore citizens' opinion even they do not have effective solution. Therefore I believe, to prevent international infectious disease and relieve people, the whole world should cooperate to stop international movements.

2) How I found my argument

My first research question was that what is characteristic and definition of internaional infectious disease. It helped me to understand exact definition of international epidemic and its many other traits which will be used to understand the readers. Also, it guided me to find out more informaion about another rold of WHO and maneuver of governments for prevention of international epidemics. I believe that my research was reasonable for my essay because it is necessary explanation to understand my essay.

3) New research questions

I still need these several questions for my essay.

a) Is there real damage case of epidemics which caused by international events in Korea and other countires ?

b) What Airport Quarantine Station do for outbreak of epidemics?

c) What are prevention of International Infectious disease?

d) What is trait of International events?

4) Connections to the Harvard Sampler

This argument has many connections to the Harvard Sampler. The chapter 'Medical Detectives' is about Public Health and history of epidemics over the past and until now. My topic is about present situation toward epidemics, so it is connected with the Harvard Sampler.

Research

Research Example: 10/7 Simple explanation of International infectious disease.

Source:
http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=487879&cid=42299&categoryId=42299

My Topic:
The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemics break out.

What I hope to learn from this source:
I hope to learn about why it is dangerous and its solution of international infectious disease.

Notes:

1. International infectious disease is epidemic which its infectivity is very strong.
- International infectious disease is not an academic term.

2. It doesn't exist in paritular countries, so its precautionary measure or treatment are not established well. Therefore its fatality rate is very high.

3. To prevent international infecious disease, solution such as isolation ward, laboratory and facility has been devised.

Final Thoughts:

I could learn about exact meaning of international diseas and its dangerousness. Also, I want to research more about its solution and prevention.

2014년 9월 1일 월요일

Classical argument outline

1. The introduction, which warms up the audience, establishes goodwill and rapport with the readers, and announces the general theme or thesis of the argument.

I will start by making mention of epidemics, Ebola virus which causes serious atmosphere right now. Also, I will use example of international events held by DukSeong Women's University. And then, I will utter why host of international events made Korean citizens worried and furious. In the end, I will end the introduction by this thesis - The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemic break out.

2. The narration, which summarizes relevant background material, provides any information the audience needs to know about the environment and circumstances that produce the argument, and set up the stakes-what’s at risk in this question. In academic writing, this often takes the form of a literature review.

I will explain exact definition of epidemics and infectious disease. And history of international events that correlate with spread of epidemics to support my thesis.

3. The confirmation,which lays out in a logical order (usually strongest to weakest or most obvious to most subtle) the claims that support the thesis, providing evidence for each claim.

First, I will explain that many sources of infection all over the world are likely to spread out by moving internationally.Therefore, a large scale of movements of people and supplies would affect on spreading infectious disease. Second, I will insist that calming down people is important because
Lastly, I will describe the situation that the most of governments do not have any proper prevention for epidemics when it breaks out. And then I will conclude that in this situation it is reasonable to suspend or stop the international events.

4. The refutation and concession, which looks at opposing viewpoints to the writer’s claims, anticipating objections from the audience, and allowing as much of the opposing viewpoints as possible without weakening the thesis.

I concede that if epidemics break out, the governments would take action for it. However, I will explain the situation that some governments are very passive about it even though whole citizens are worrying about them. I will insist that the government should do as the citizens want to.

5. The summation, which provides a strong conclusion, amplifying the force of the argument, and showing the readers that this solution is the best at meeting the circumstances.

I will end my essay by providing my points again, and example of fatal epidemic which had really harmful effects on the world.

2014년 8월 25일 월요일

Research

Research Example: 8/26 What is an Interantional Epidemic?

Source:
http://terms.naver.com/entry.nhn?docId=1067403&cid=40942&categoryId=31659

My Topic:
The world should suspend all the international events and games if epidemics break out.

What I hope to learn from this source:
First, I want to define my topic so that readers can understand it easily.
Second, I hope this source will give reliable grounds for my essay
(Especially, I want the source which can let us know about dangerness of Epidemic)

Notes:

1. International epidemic is dangerous malignant infectious disease which can spread out all over the world by travelers, cargo, vessel and airplane. WHO has selected dangerous diseases as international epidemics.

2. International epidemics can be divided into quarantinable disease and 감시 전염병

3. Cholera, Black Plague and Yello Fever are quarantinable disease. If these epidemics break out, WHO notify this to member countries. Members countries give an inoculation and isolate patients. Also, they stop the vessels, airplane departed from contagion area.

4. Eruptive typhus, recurrent fever, malaria and influenza are 감시 전염병. Like quarantinable disease, WHO collect information about that epidemics and notify it to members countries.

Final Thoughts:

I could know about exact definition of international epidemic and role of WHO when epidemic breaks out. I think I should reaserch about another role of WHO and maneuver of goverments about international epidemics. Also, I need to find more information about dangerness of infectious diseases and its affection to the world.